Final Version of 55 word story

Standing at the steel doors glaring down at the warm blooded body of my father. Slowly I’m watching his breath decrease.

“Father?!” I said.

Apathetically I ponder as I watched closely at my father’s face. All I can view was this warm hearted man with a cold body lying. It was his time to go.

WARM-UP

COMPLETELY out of the earth thought today!
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V2. Time has come

Standing at the steel doors viewing down at the warm blooded body of my father. Slowly I’m watching his breath decrease.

“Father?!” I said.

Apathetically I ponder as I watched closely at my father’s face. All I can view was this
warm hearted man with a cold body lying. It was his time to go.

Through glistening shadows of my struggle path
Never has there been…
anyone
blindly enough to see
Fearlessly engaging to the path full of lust
Your chain of sterling silver started to rust away in my solitude

Cooling dark breezes shouts firmly through me tonight
reminiscing that you’re the guided fate
to which, can sober away this clear water
But than you turn out to be my
biggest fear

Laughing away at miserable times
Treating our decisions like a piece of
emptiness
Reconsidering the flaws I’ve done
Deciding to take on the knowledge and so…
I drifted away

Downfalls creeps slowly at my conscious
sinking shallowly into our open sea
You can’t underestimate,
but progression yield’s to time

Knotted with the toughest words and emotions
Understanding the toughest Greek warrior still
Can’t maintain…
Breaking down strenuously can lead to suicide
Standing alone with no one in sight to view

Singing in tunes of death with this knife
Tonight I’ll leave a puddle of lavish red water
The black world is calling out towards me
Slowly… creeping…
away from reality’s image

Slurping down your lovable lust
Swimming in blood like a
beautiful black dove
Flashing memories of a rainbow full of
laughter…
Till today I’m still living in a fantasy dream

07.07.07

Crackin… Snapin… down the hall
There strolled in a yellow eager man
Dancing in his mind; withholding the dark grief
Drowning…
in the world that happens to deepens his
seldom breathes

Three weeks drove by like a tragedy in Shakespeare
Lying helplessly…
crying away every moment remembered
Configuring the equation to his family tree
While…
Struggling to find the plug-in outlet to
his son’s embrace

Down the hollow halls you can fear
the thundering reverberation of suffering shouts
strenuously…
Rushing, colliding over one another, just to
catch up to his threatening gratitude

Wounded with the sniveling of his alluring halo
Nothing can help but to exaggerate and
harkens d-r-e-a-d-f-u-l-l-y…
Crippled as never before; he taunt,
snickering at every step
from the assistance that will make him dream

Driven with fear; in with an identification status
Hoping it was all nothing but a glance of déjà vu
Father oh just wait…
your daughter struggled through enough
Through numerous villains; green, yellow, and then red
She passed it, driving away through forests
full of sirens of pigs at every angle
Cautiously she made it through to the other end


Just hold your last breath, one more time till the time she has arrive…
You won’t be forgotten oh father,
PLEASE, how could you…


Tower time strikes turbulently at six o’clock
the yellowness deviated into pale blueness
Panic attacks strikes hard from below
Preparing for actions
this heart shuts and drops
s…l…o…w…l…y all you can hear is
unspoken emotions


Dial-tones being dialed all over town
Fumbling through my mobile device I shiver…
Faith is challenging me
ticking away, time dramatically
every seconds worth to make a change
But,
no one will get past the dial-tone now


Mister clock strikes 6:59 pm, the
yellow man’s breath decreases slowly
Thirty seconds later, all that was there was…
A warm heart within a cold stone bowl
Stomping in, here she is
Lying at her birth father’s chest
reminiscing back to the day when she couldn’t say
nothing but grr…gaa… da-da… da-da…


Lightening strikes the pumping soul of
the human brain, causing the distinct to
breakdown and weep away at this very man
Stuttering voice creep behind her conscious
Oh she inquire,
This is too soon



He’s gone for ever, her first earthling host
The one who taught her and yells at her
finally is shuts down gone
World shouts with pain from underneath
Last good-byes were given, now he’s wheeled off
to the ice box…
Swallowing my own words down to my stomach,
Father… Rest In Peace July 7, 2007 at 7:00 pm


<3 SPX

P.S This is my last revision before Kronzer goes on maternity leave, so she can read it. Thanks for the feedback it really help me add a voice into my poem!

Second Revision of Poem; "A Time My World Change"

07.07.07

Crackin… Snapin… down the hall
There strolled in a yellow eager man
Dancing in his mind; withholding the dark grief
Drowning…
in the world that happens to deepens his
seldom breathes

Three weeks drove by like a tragic in shakespares
Lying helplessly…
crying away every moment remembered
Configuring the equation to his family tree
While…
Struggling to find the plug-in outlet to
his son’s embrace

Down the hallow halls you can fear
the thundering suds of suffering shouts
strenuously…
Rushing, colliding over one another, just to
catch up to his threatening gratitude

Wounded with the sniveling of his alluring halo
Nothing can help but to exaggerate and
harkened d-r-e-a-d-f-u-l-l-y…
Crippled as never before; he taunted
snickering at every steps
from the assistance that will make him dream

Driven with fear; in with an identification status
Through numerous villains; green, yellow, and then red
I passed it, driving away through forests
full of sirens of pigs at every angle
Causiously I made it through to the other end


Tower time strikes turbulently at six o’clock
the yellowness deviated into pale blueness
Panic attacks strikes hard from below
Preparing for actions
this heart shuts and drops
s…l…o…w…l…y all you can hear is
unspoken emotions

Dial-tones being dialed all over town
Can it get any worst I ask?
Faith is challenging me
ticking away time dramatically
every seconds worth to make a change
But,
no one will get past the dial-tone now


Mister clock strikes 6:59 pm, the
yellow man breathe decreases slowly
Thirty seconds later, all that was there was…
A warm heart within a coldstone bowl

Lightening strikes the pumping soul of
the human brain, causing the distinct to
breakdown and weep away at this very man
Stuttering voice creep behind my conscious
Oh I ask,
This is too soon

He’s gone for ever, my first earthlingy host
The one who taught me and yapped at me
finally is shout down gone
World shouts with pain from underneath
Lastgood-byes were given, now he’s wheeled off
to the ice box…

<3 SPX

UPDATES

07.07.07

Crackin… Snapin… down the hall
There strolled in a yellow eager man
Dancing in his mind; holding the dark grief
Living in another world that deepens his breathes

Three weeks drove by like a tragic
Lying helplessly; weeping away every moment remembered
Configuring the equation to his family tree
Struggles to find the plug-in outlet to his son’s embrace


>>>>>>>>>>>> The first 2 Stanza to my poem from the topic a time when my world change!

What a day...

Well what a day it is today...
I have so much deadlines to accomplish for this upcoming week. Although I don't work much there's still so much stuff that has to be done. *geesh will life ever get simpler. Anyways it's okay... Well... I'm currently still sick and nothing I can do about that either.

Yesterday my siblings and I went out to catch a movie together. My brothers went and watched "Underworld" while the sisters went to watch "He's just not that into you". The movie was pretty good but it can also be better. There wasn't s much to it as I expected but it's cool I guess.

DEADLINES TO GET DONE WITH:

-HmoobTeen Bio for why I want to volunteer for the HND workshop
*DUE SUNDAY 2/10
-HmoobTeen Cover and Bio Design
*DUE??
-10 Minute play revision for CW1
*DUE TUESDAY 2/17

<3 Sherri P. Xiong

HOW CAN I FORGET... OMG!

Happy 17th Birhtday to my lil' sister KOULA XIONG

Process of Revising...

I'm currently in the process of revising my 10 minute play for creative writing. Still figuaring what I want for the ending? Anyways if you decided to stumble upon this page would you please give in suggestion that I will take into consideration for making my ending to this play.

*ARGH Today has sucked badly, because I'm still very very sick and it's not good being sick with this ugly flu and runny nose. C'mon I mean it's been the whole freakin weekend already what more is there to ask for? Hopefully I can recover soon by the end of this week, so I can go out and enjoy the weekend. This past weekend was a wonderful weekend but I was stuck home and working because I was very ill.

Well... well... class is almost over so I better get going... *toodles

<3 Sherri P. Xiong

[UNTITLED AT THE MOMENT]

Characters:

Elena- the nice girl that always got treated badly, because she’s always too nice. Not the most attractive girl. Very nerdy and always strives for the best.
Melody- Elena co-worker/friend who is very lazy yet beautiful.
Nicolas- Elena’s biggest rival at work. Such a jerk, super arrogant, thinks he can own this world.
Kenji- Elena’s co-worker who helped builds her self-esteem as the play go on.

[short summary:] - so you know where I’m going with this story

Elena’s on a regular path to work, got into the elevator and was running late for work. Because she’s always an early bird and running 5-10 minutes late is not a good thing for her at all. So got on the elevator greets with Nicolas and Melody had their hate love argument as Melody states. Then got to work and Melody tell hers to finish up her works that she didn’t do the night before, for the staff meeting that day. Elena always too nice couldn’t say no to hurt her feelings so she decided to take on the role. Kenji helped her this day to stick up for herself and not let other punk her around like she is just some crazy fool living.

[Theme:]- Love yourself before you’re able to love someone else.

ELENA
[rush crazily into the elevator door]

NICOLAS
What!? Running late again PUNK A**!

ELENA
Yes, what can you say I’m a girl I need to dress to impress.

NICOLAS
Oh! Please Elena I would never look a some punk like you and ever think you look HOT. You have to try much harder if you want to achieve that look miss.

ELENA
[takes out her planner to look at what her schedule is like for the day ahead of her]
Nicolas you know what-

NICOLAS
[looks at Elena with a grin]
Know what, I know everything you can possibly think of. Of course I am-

ELENA
Yea you’re a jerk! What else can you be? You disgust me Nicolas…

[The elevators door open as Melody walks in.]

MELODY
Good Morning Elena, you look adorable today; ready for today’s task of jobs to do?

ELENA
Today’s been such a bad day, I got up late and now I just gone through a very aggressive conversation with someone (I’M NOT POINTING ANY FINGERS).

NICOLAS
What you talkin about me ey? Elena huh? (groans deeply)

ELENA
Hey I didn’t mention your name at all, why you assuming things.(*sighs)

MELODY
Okay, you two quite this childish play okay! Why are you guys always constantly nagging at each other.

ELENA
[starts to blush and get nervous and started to stuttered]

[The elevators open and each person walks to sit at their own little cubicle preparing to get ready to go to the staff meeting.]

MELODY
[walks up to Elena’s cubicle giving her the monthly report to give at the meeting with the rest of the staffs.]
Here Elena, this is the monthly report of our spending, will you please present this at the meeting for me?

ELENA
But-

MELODY
Thank you for much Elena I knew you would do it for me.

NICOLAS
[starts walking towards Elena and approaches Melody asking her if she wanted to go grab coffee.]
Melody would you care to grab some caribou with me before the meeting?


MELODY
I would love to Nicolas how thoughtful of you to invite me to grab some. That’s a good idea to so we can have mind thinking skills when we get into today’s meeting.
Oh! Elena would you please bring me the files at my desk to the meeting as well, Thank you so much you’re a true wonder wall for me.

ELENA
[so tensed up, very fired about to yell at Melody; STAND UP, clinches her fist.]
Yes I’ll see you at the meeting with the monthly report and your paper works on your desk. Enjoy getting caribou.

[Melody and Nicolas starts heading towards the elevator.]

ELENA
(*sigh) Why does Melody always take advantage of me and tell me to do all her dirty little work. I can never say, “NO” to her at all too. Is this what I get for being too nice? OMG, this is horrible I wonder when will I be able to get done with all these paper work in time for the meeting.

[bangs her head on the desk and cries and yell]

Okay Elena put yourself together it’s A-O-K!

[As Elena gets to work Nicolas best friend Kenji walks by…]

KENJI
Good morning Elena! I was wondering have you seen Nicolas at all?

ELENA
[with an ugly grin on her face]
Morning Kenji (*heavy sigh), Nicolas died on the elevator ride this morning to the office so I threw him out on 3rd floor.

KENJI
[puzzled look]

ELENA
I’m just kidding he went and grabbed some coffee at caribou with Miss. Melody
[gives off an attitude face while saying Miss. Melody]

KENJI
[smiles at Elena]
I see well do you want to grab lunch after this staff meeting here? Huh, Elena?

ELENA
[surprise look]
YOU MUST BE INSANE JERK! I HAVE SO MUCH CRAP TO DO HERE, HOW CAN I POSSIBLY GO GRAB LUNCH. I HAVE MY OWN WORK TO ACCOMPLISH ALONG WITH MISS. MELODY’S PAPER WORKS TO DO I CAN NOT GRAB LUNCH WITH YOU.
[groans and sigh heavily]

KENJI
[started to feel down and looked rejected.]

ELENA
Fine I’ll try to see what I can do!

KENJI
Alrite, I’ll give you a call okay.
[takes out the cell phone to jot down Elena number]

[Kenji left to go to grab paper works from the printer and left to the meeting.]

ELENA
Why me? I have so much work to do, what am I gonna do please help….
[Elena got up and started towards Melody’s cubicle to grab the paper works, so she can look it over before the meeting to make sure there’s nothing wrong with it.]

ELENA
Melody… oh my Melody… Look she is so messy; for a well dressed and pretty girl you sure are a pig when it comes to cleanliness.

[Melody and Nicolas walking into the room after buying their caribou coffees.]

MELODY
Elllllllennnnaaaaaaaaaaaaa…. Are you finish with the monthly report?

ELENA
[grins while standing up from Melody’s cubicle]
I’m working on it don’t worry Melody… It will be done by time we get going to the meeting in about 45 minutes.

NICOLAS
Why would you have Elena slow a** do this job for you, I think this girl is struggling already!

ELENA
[yelling]
Nicolas just leave me alone you JERK FACE. What is your problem with everything I do!?
[Elena runs out to the front of the building. She sits and cries as Kenji walks by from getting some errands done.]

KENJI
Elena are you okay?

ELENA
[wipes her tears quickly and turns toward Kenji.]
Hi Kenji, yes I’m okay don’t worry about it.

KENJI
Are you….

ELENA
Boy don’t worry I’m good, gotta run now! I have lots to finish!


KENJI
[grasp….]
I guess so…

[Kenji runs to grab Elena’s arm.]

KENJI
Elena I can’t stand seeing you like this stop being so nice and doing everyone’s crappy work. They all came to work here to you know why are you so STUPID and doing everything for everyone. Even when you have a s*** load of things on your own hands to deal with and get done so with.

ELENA
[turns around and tears starts to come out of her eyes.]
Kenji I can’t resist to hurt anyone’s feelings! Don’t you understand.

KENJI
[spoke with ANGER]
Of course no one wants to hurt anyone’s feeling period. But look at how you’re being treated if someone else can hurt your feeling I’m pretty sure that at times it’s alrite to just say, “NO!”

ending not yet completed...